Dance of a Heartbeat

Your poetry always invokes emotion which engages your readers well. This particular work, if it has a flaw, would be in the syllabic structure you have. It isn't necessary for every line in a verse to have even syllable structure, but in some cases it takes away from the flow of the poem. Your first verse has a structure of 7-8-8. How about this?

'As I lay me down to sleep
should death, ever, my soul reap
this love I shall always keep.'

Here you would retain what you want to convey to your reader, and improve the fluidity of the verse. One more example is the second verse. Here we can change the structure of the first line to flow better with the others.

'In your name, steadfast, I hold on
Our common ground a special bond
that sees me to the coming dawn.'

I am always amazed at how well you do with blending the right amount of adverbs and metaphors to spice up your beautiful poetry. I am, and remain a big fan of yours Li, and feel that God has given you a gift which will only get better over time...